I won the critique in a contest over at The Bookshelf Muse blog, a great place for writiers to find information, mainly for Thesaurus. Lets face it, us writers need a little help sometimes when we're stuck or too tired to think, so check it out and join in the fun competitions. Who knows, you may be lucky enough to win a great critique too.
I loved how Angela and Becca gave completely different, but great suggestions. And both helped me tighten my rather long chapter, so thanks so much, girls. You rock the writer's worlds and we love you both to bits.
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